Blog Post #4


Blog Post #4

The peer review workshop we did in class on Thursday was the most effective peer review I have ever taken part in. Kendall and Savannah gave me great notes as to how I can improve my writing. Some of the criticism they gave was that my writing was scattered: my analysis of rhetorical techniques was good, but the essay lacked a central theme. They helped me come up with a good thesis to help give my writing a guide and narrow down the purpose of the rhetorical strategies my stakeholder used. They also suggested I reintroduce the theme in each of my body paragraphs: showing how each artifact contributes to that theme. Another note they both agreed on is that I use the word help too much in my writing. This is an easy fix, but I was not aware of the issue until they pointed it out. Moving forward, I plan to re-organize my rhetorical analysis. I want to create more of a hook at the beginning by writing a story introducing the issue and the local people it is effecting. Then I am going to write a more effective thesis so that my rhetorical analysis is centered around a theme and therefore easier for the reader to follow. Finally, I want to do a better job at concluding my analysis, possibly through tying in the same story I used at the beginning and then re-stating my thesis. IN short, I need to do a better job of informing the reader what I will tell them, and then reviewing what I told them in my conclusion. After completing all of these things, I feel confident my analysis will come together in the way I want it to.

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